Ryan

“Dehydrated By: Ryan I believe that you need to stay hydrated because if you don’t you will feel all droopy, get tired, and get extremely angry.

Once you get dehydrated you will get extremely droopy. So all you’ll want to do is just sit around and do nothing. Then you will get dizzy and just fall over. For example when I was at cup scout camp I was extremely dehydrated. So I was hiking with everyone else and I collapsed.

The next thing that will happen is you will get tired. And trust me you’ll understand because it will feel like all this wind is going in to your eyes. It felt the same way when I was at Cub Scout camp. After I got droopy I got extremely tired and went to bed at 5:00.

The last thing that will happen to you is you will get extremely annoyed! You might think I’m crazy now but once your dehydrated you will want to kick or punch someone for no reason like a mad chicken. But when I was at cup scout camp it was like someone else was controlling me because I remember I felt like punching everyone there. But once I woke up the next morning I felt so much better.

So the next time you say to yourself I don’t feel like drinking any water. Remember what just might happen to you from this story. i sugest you should indent but nice title. i suggest tierd to lazy bb  Thats so intesting that you get angry when your Deyhidrited. I love it.I love all your verbs like punching. Markell Am glad that your a smart cub scout! jack I loved how you used collapsed. the on thing I think you could change is tierd.FH! Try not to repet The droopy part so much, at the beging of your story! __-C.E.__ I've been to cubscout camp to, also they made me drink 5 gallens of water, in just two days!!!!!!jack your peice included a lot of information but maby chane some verbs.a.f you can add more to writing to make it longer and more verbs. R.G //__Great job on verbs like, last!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! MB!!!!!! (Markell)__//

Ryan I highlighted the words you got to change they should be the same by tommorw if they are not please don,t freak i'll change them all A.S.A.P. All and all A great peice. Birdiesom Maddie

you might want to change so brayton

There's nothing i can change because it so gooooooooood.J>B