Renae

renae __ Hospitals __ __ By Renae __

== Hospitals care for you even when your grouchy .when I went to the hospital I had to get my tonsils out of the back of my neck. When I was done I was a bit grumpy. They did not care. They were giving me orange juice and ice cream but I would not take it but a nurse told me “you have to take it.” After she said that I had to take it. if i didn't i would be sore. ==

== Hospitals are there for you anytime. Like if you broken a bone or you get really hurt. My sister got really sick from asthma and she had to stay in the hospital for about four or five days and got back in shape because of the stuff at the the hospital. ==

Hospitals are great and are important use a different verb than broke cool$$$$$$$$$ so sad. I suggest that you have some more verbs but awsome.BB I love your story and your examples but I suggest you use more verbs. aspen f. The your before the ok is inrect, so is one more thing. i think every thing is alright ipseat for the pharagraph beginings. use veriaty. Try using "ill" instead of "sick" sometimes.Casey nice. except you should change a couple of your centence beginings.zach if I were you I would not put hospital so much at the beging of your story!!-C.E. (Chanda Escue) maby you should do diffrent sentence beginings beside hospital lauren Also you need to indent! C.E,(Chanda Escue)